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       "Plot" is defined simply as the main story of a novel, play, short story or even a magazine article. Dropping surprises and questions into the plot is what keeps readers turning pages. Richard F. Janssen, former Senior Editor of BusinessWeek and a former London Bureau Chief of the Wall Street Journal. has written his first novel and come up with a most unusual plot with religious and supernatural overtones and numerous questions and surprises along the way. Because the first chapter is so key in setting the stage for the book, he would like to know how well he may have foreshadowed the development of the book.

        He would like to know what the reader takes away from this chapter, and how he or she may anticipate what is coming. One way to do that is to ask you, the reader, to finish the "plot" with your own ideas, based on what you have read. Mr. Janssen will choose what he considers the most imaginative twist on his plot and the greatest clarity of writing. As a "prize," he will serve as the writer's personal writing coach, reviewing the first chapter of your book, a short story, or magazine article. He will provide a written analysis of how the plot could be improved and certain writing techniques you can consider. That's the first prize with four runner-up prizes: autographed copies of "The Evil I Do." 

         Many of the entries will be posted on this website with the names of the authors.

          The rules of our informal contest are simple. There is nothing to buy. Begin by reading the first chapter (below). Then complete the beginning of the plot with your own ideas - in no more than 400 words. Before July 15, 2007, email your entry or send it to "My plot, Box 6351 Williamsburg, VA 23185. Let your imagination fly. Win or lose, it's great training for your own writing and plot development.

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   CHAPTER ONE

 

            Aerosov Flight 012 from London to Moscow had been aloft all evening. It shouldn’t have been, and Ron Travers knew it. 

He had been a travel writer for enough decades to know that the non-stop should have been on the ground at least two hours ago. He also knew that Europe was gripped by a sprawling winter storm, and that the captain had mumbled something over the PA about having to fly around it. But if that’s all it was, why had he sensed such abrupt changes of course, and all those bouts of turbulence?  And why hadn’t the captain said a word since?

Lack of candor on the part of a pilot never did sit well with Ron Travers. Nor was he amused when some of the travel writers with him on this junket would call out like kids on a long car trip, “Daddy, are we there yet?” Ron Travers would have preferred more decorum. And more to drink. He surreptitiously tipped vodka from his pocket flask to replenish the only martini he’d been served, and wondered idly if this was Aerosov’s revenge. Years ago, after an unnervingly turbulent flight on the same route, relieved only by a can of  tepid Pepsi,  he had panned the Soviet Union’s discount carrier for its “early Leninist level of concern for capitalist comforts and proletarian safety.”

Later, he had learned that to the doctrinaire Communists who ran the airline back then, expending extra fuel solely to avoid turbulence was a decadent Western luxury; besides, the airline couldn’t afford it. He wondered what the excuse would be this time. May as well ask the captain.  One reason for being on this trip was to do a before-and-after freelance piece about Aerosov, and the PR office in New York had promised him a flight-deck interview.  He rang for the flight attendant, waited a full five minutes, and rang again.

Her flag-red lipstick only drew Ron Travers’ attention to her characteristically neglected teeth.  He wondered idly if so many layers of makeup would prevent her from smiling, and whether she had ever said “Coffee, tea or me?”  to a handsome, or perhaps just promisingly affluent, passenger.  Her layovers these days, he was willing to bet, must be joyless times of whining about pensions and dental benefits, and he found himself feeling sorry for her.  He explained his request, with she acknowledged with nothing more than raised eyebrows. This was inauspicious, but to Ron’s surprise, she returned quickly and touched his shoulder.

“The captain is called Ivanov.  He will receive you now.  Come, there is little time.”

“Good.  That means we’re finally getting to Moscow.”

 She did not respond.  Ron rose and came face-to-face with her.  Even then, she didn’t smile. Ron told himself it  was only the makeup.  Surely, the captain would be more communicative.

Or would he? The captain must have heard the cockpit door open and close, but he kept his eyes on the instrument panel.  So did his co-pilot. Ron looked at his watch, and waited. They must be doing something important. A minute went by, then another. Maybe they were too busy to notice him.  Ron cleared his throat.  The captain spoke, although without turning around.

“Yes, your presence has not gone unnoticed. Aerosov is honored to have you aboard, Mr. Travers.  Have you flown with us before?” 

“I have, once, but I don’t remember much about the flight.”

“Or is there little you care to remember about it?”

Ron smiled to himself.   Taunting this cardboard captain about poor service could be what it takes to get some usable quotes.  “That too, captain.  But your question strikes me as naïve.”

“Naïve?  And how is that?”

“In the old days, the KGB would have informed you about my previous contact with Aerosov.  And about my criticism.  I would expect no less from its successor.”

“Nor would I.  Perhaps it is that you have become less important.”

Ooh, good. I’ve gotten under his skin, but now it’s time to soften my tone.  “Ah, I suppose you’re right.  I was a foreign correspondent, you know, and I learned many  things of no interest to American newspaper editors.  I called them my leftovers.  But juicy tidbits, some of them.  Why let leftovers go to waste when some people were so hungry for them?”

“People?  What people?”

“Your government people.  No, I did not deal with Soviet intelligence.   It was less risky to peddle my leftovers to your surrogates.  You know,  the Czechs, the Bulgarians and such.  They were hungrier, and paid better.”

“Ha! And were not so demanding of quality.  Mr. Travers, I, too, am a practical man, but  never do I betray my country.  For 25 years have I been pilot, with 10 years trusted to fly international routes. Even for Aeroflot.  Think of all the times I could have defected.”

“And all the places, too.  Which country tempted you the most?”

“You think it is America, no?  Correct, but maybe not for the reasons you think.  It is that America always trusts, Russia always suspects.  Maybe you are a good American after all.  Please, take that jump seat.  You will join me in a toast.”

“Thanks. I thought you’d never ask.”  It sounded less an invitation than an order, and oh, boy, what a gem for his story.  Besides, Ron had been too long between drinks.  Still, Ron couldn’t quite believe it until the captain pulled a liter of Stolichnaya from his well-worn black leather flight bag.  Ivanov filled two first-class tumblers to the brim, and Ron accepted his eagerly.

“To America!”  It was Ivanov’s toast, and Ron Travers had been around enough to know how to respond.

“To Russia!”

“To friendship!”

“To our families!”

And so it went, until Ron Travers’ attempts to initiate a useful interview grew feebler.  Seeing that Ivanov’s eyes kept darting back to the instrument panel, Ron automatically followed them with his own.

“My friend, do not waste your time.  You cannot read my instruments. No matter.  Even to me, they tell nothing.  Except crazy things.”

Ron choked and sputtered.  Crazy? Like…?”

“Like all sixes. Even with minuses.  Airspeed minus 666 knots an hour.  Altitude 666 kilometers below sea level.  Attitude 666 degrees east. Fuel supply 666 pounds…impossible, impossible.”

  Ron was relieved.  “So it’s just an instrument problem.  We’re flying just fine.  I bet if the co-pilot pushes a reset button…”

“My friend, we have done all that we can.  And the co-pilot, he can do no more, period.  He sits like in a, what is your word, oh, a stupor.”

Which makes three of us. “You mean he’s drunk…too?”

“No, not at all.  He has been this way since…something happened.”

“Something?  What?”   

“We were on autopilot, of course.  Normal for this stage of the flight.  I saw our sticks start shaking.  Naturally, I switched off autopilot and I grabbed my stick. It swung back and forth.  It swung so hard I had to let go.  I was afraid my wrists would break.”

“I don’t remember that kind of turbulence.”

Nyet,  turbulence it was not. Something strong, stubborn…I don’t know. My co-pilot, he is younger.  He could hold longer on his stick.  A few seconds longer.  I had hope.  But then it swung away from him, too.  So violent, it was, that he screamed. Like wrestling with a madman..  I saw his head go back, then forward,  like you see it now.”

“When…when was that, captain?”

“It was a moment before the instruments started spinning.  They did that for perhaps one  minute, like, like some wheel for gambling.  They were making me dizzy. When there were sparks and the smell came, I had to put my hands over my eyes.  When I could look again, the instruments had stopped.  Like, oh yes, like roulette wheels.  They all stopped on the same numbers.  All sixes.”

“You mean eights.  Electronic things always show eights when they’re turned off.”

 Ivanov shrugged, and looked at his watch.  “Nyet, sixes.  But what does it matter?  You asked me when.   It was all about two hours and twenty three minutes ago.”

              “That long! That smell—was it like insulation burning?  We must have been struck by lightning, that’s it.  Don’t airliners always survive lightning strikes?”

            “Airlines like us to think so.  When no wreckage is ever found, who can say otherwise?  But, yes,  lightning strikes I have known.  Insulation smell I have known.  This was a foul smell, more, uh, animal, or human.  Like in a prison, or a tomb.  Or a toilet, maybe.  Ha!”

Ron shuddered.  I must get the captain back on a rational tack, the sooner the better.

“Sunspots, then?”

“Hmm.  Some kind of radiation, yes.  As from a nuclear war.  Or lasers.  Those Star Wars of yours. Ha!”

“I prefer the sunspot theory.”  

Captain Ivanov nodded half-heartedly.  “I know that also emanations from the sun can distort radio waves. They are both forms of electromagnetic radiation, about which we know much, but also know too little.  We know they can disrupt, yes.  But can they impose order?  Can they take over my controls? I think not, but…”  His voice trailed off.

“Oh, take over controls…yes, have you tried to revive your co-pilot?”

“Of course.  But he has no moving, no words.  He only breathes.  I fear he is paralyzed.”

 “So, it’s all in your hands?  To land at night, with no instruments?”

             “Da and nyet. One instrument only works. The radio compass shows we are still bearing southeast, to Moscow. And I have my wristwatch. It is Swiss, so it is neutral. Never my enemy. Always, I can make rough estimate of our speed.  Soon, we go below the clouds and look for the lights of Moscow. You may be of some help...”

Ron Travers grabbed the vodka bottle from the captain’s hand, and sucked at it noisily. “Me! But how?”

            Ivanov firmly reclaimed the bottle, smiled wearily, and politely passed it back.  “But you Americans, you believe in ‘Friendly Skies,’ do you not? To say nothing of God.”

            “My captain, I’ll tell you what I believe in.  I believe there is nothing  less friendly than an ice-cold sky.  That I always believe.  Sometimes, I believe in God.  And I know that whenever man is flying, man is thumbing his nose at God, at God’s strongest law.”

“Thou shalt not…do something?”

“No. The law of gravity.”

“That law is not of God, it is science law.”

“Well, I see I can be no help to you, captain.  I’d better get back to my seat.”

            “No. You will stay. I am still captain.”

Ron Travers felt too weak in the knees to defy the pilot.  He kept trying to get a grip on himself. “If,  I mean, when we make it back, will you, uh, find trouble?”

“Already trouble has found Ivanov. Look out the window, to my left.”

Ron looked. At first he saw nothing, but then a horizontal orange-yellow streak pierced the clouds. It blurred and faded and flared again, grew smaller and then larger. 

“Now look out the right.”

“It’s there, too. Too regular to be lightning, I admit. But what…?”

“Warplanes.  An escort.  Our air force has single-jet interceptors. They must have been sent to assure that I do not deviate to another country, that I face the music in Moscow.”

“Defect with your airliner? Steal their plane? Don’t they trust you more than that by now?” 

 Ivanov shrugged. “Who could be sure? My only hope is for a rough landing at Moscow. Perhaps what you call crash landing. At the very least, I will have damaged an expensive aircraft on a prime international flight. While carrying travel writers only too willing to blacken Aerosov’s name around the world.”

            “But it wouldn’t be your fault.”

             “Thank you. Now think about this: To prove I have much alcohol in my blood, for the authorities that will be easy. To prove an invisible force took over the controls, for me that would be impossible.  Either way, life for me is finished.”

             “There must be some way out.”

             “Yes. It is in my flight bag. Once, I was in Miami.  There was a kind of arms bazaar,  they called it a gun show. I was curious and like I was saying about America, you trust your people.  Ha!  You trust even Ivanov to walk in and pay a man my $200, and walk out with... ”

A loud, synthesized voice cut him off. “Fuel gone! Descend!  Fuel gone! Descend.”

           For a millisecond or two, Captain Ivanov felt a rush of hope that other devices would soon spring back to life. If he were as close to Moscow as he reckoned...but no. The voice faltered and there was only the unmistakable drone of dying engines.  Ron caught himself almost savoring his exclusive insider’s awareness. I wonder if my buddies back in the cabin are finally succumbing to an appropriate degree of panic.  Then came the captain’s command.

            “Unfasten your seat belt.”

            “Unfasten?”

             “Listen to me.  If we touch down tail-first, you may be thrown clear.  If you are, you may live.  Here, take the bottle. If you live, I ask one lie for me. Say it was yours. We never met.”

Ron nodded, and unfastened his seat belt.  He could feel the plane descending, slowing and yawing for lack of power.  The cockpit door opened.  In the pale yellow emergency lighting, Ron looked up to see the senior stewardess brace herself on Ivanov’s shoulders.  She massaged his neck and mumbled something in Russian.

            Ron crossed his arms over his eyes and crouched in the crash position.  BANG!  An explosion filled the cockpit.  A second later, another BANG.  Another, and another. They overwhelmed his eardrums and he lost count.  His shirt felt warm and wet.  He imagined being in a warm bath, and it eased his mind.

 

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